Green leaves getting marcscent;
Turning to tenebrous,
Black shed of clouds over moon and stars covering around all around...
A shadow rectifying its darkness,
Mixture of dark in light gleaming texture drab off its shine;
Closure of bulb quite for the light or resigns,
Close eyes can feel the dark; the emptiness inside!!
Eclipse covering the sun turns off its bright light.
so spontaneous Simran...Good.
ReplyDeleteA very clever one..and darkness seems to be seen by the right eyes..
ReplyDeletewell personified simo dear..
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Keep going girl!
close your eyes till the eclipse is over have patience...........now open your eyes, you can again see the green leaves and bright light.
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Nice..and impressive...
ReplyDeleteSo much for a lunar eclipse. :D
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Beautiful..When I try to relate what you write with your age,it doesn't happen..its always a pleasure to be here...
ReplyDeleteHi little one...I'm allowing myself to stay in the dark, only for a while... The One who has led me there, will take me out of there... It could be painful...Geez, it is painful. It's scary, yes... I have come to terms with my need to be always with somebody.... for constant craving for attention. God has taken that spotlight on me and allowed me to look at myself... to know whose hands will be there to guide me back to light... Darkness is "holy"... Thanks for your poem... love you little one :)
ReplyDeleteA beautiful, hear-felt rendition of the eclipse, my dear
ReplyDeleteliked ur dark expression written in enlighted way. :)
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@Snehu:
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Thank you :)
@Sanchi:
But I want to feel the dark,the emptiness..how it feels!:)
Thanks
@Sulekkha:
ReplyDeleteYep :)..As sadness transform to happiness the same dark transform to light:)..Thank you..
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Really WoW comment too;)
Thank you..
@Shona:
How sweet! Thanks..
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Glad that you liked my thoughts ..thank you so much :)
@Hemant Kumar
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@Blasphemous Aesthete:
Ya..thinking of that I wrote this!:)
Thank you so much ..
@Alpana:
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@Dear one:
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Darkness helps us to find out who's there to protect us:)..It's scary,it's dark but still wants to feel it for a while.
Thank you so much :)..love ya too
@Rimly:
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Thanks for stopping by..
@some unspoken words:
ReplyDeleteTransforming :)...Glad you liked my enlighten thoughts..
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My best 4 lines;)..
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@Rachit
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