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Life's Crux- Had and Lost ( Fiction: 55 )

This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 30; the thirtieth edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton.



''People forgets by the time the loss you faced. '' So True!

Everything seems fine on this sandy beach like any other evening in orange shade. Laughter can be heard by everyone but no one can listen scream.
'' Hey Sea, You swallowed him, I wont' forgive you even if your waves touches my feet Million times'' 

                                               Shadorma (Syllable- 3-5-3-3-7-5)
                                                                           (In context with the Fiction written above)

The time's lap
Makes everything 
Oblivion 
I'm martyr
An exception, I lament 
Grieve! Lost someone

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Image - Shades of Orange by Harsha Chittar
Courtesy - Curious Dino Photography via www.blogaton.in




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  1. amazing 55 fiction! lovely read :)

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    1. Welcome to My Friendship, Apala

      Glad you liked the fiction:55. It's my first attempt! :-)
      Thanks for stopping by...
      Happy Friendship Day!

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  2. Brilliant phrases! I indeed moved by the lines... so genuine and significant.
    Keep it up!

    Happy Friendship Day :)
    and it’s so nice having your friendship here dear, Simran :)
    Best wishes

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    1. Happy to read your encouraging words :)
      Thank you so much!

      Wish you too A very Happy Friendship Day :)
      Pleasure to have you my friend!

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  3. Happy Friendship Day little one :)

    Thank you for introducing 'Shadorma,' it's pretty new to me. I couldn't handle such discipline in verses :) You are gifted :D

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    1. Very impressive laconic fiction. Brilliant job on shadorma. All the best !! My vote goes to you for sure :-)

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    2. Happy Friendship Day to you too , Dear One! :)

      Shadorma is new to me too. Its my first attempt for the Shadorma and Fiction.
      Happy you liked! I am really blessed! :) :)
      Thank You so much.

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    3. binzy,

      Welcome To My Friendship! :)
      Happy you liked Shadorma and Fiction. And Wow! thanks a lot for blessing me your support! Precious :)

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  4. Shadorma is something novel for me!!! ... you have done a good job with it though :)

    ATB for BAT

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  5. Neat 55...unforgivable waves!?!Nice imagery...

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    1. Welcome to My Friendship, Panchali :)

      Thank you so much :)
      Hope to see you again...
      Happy blogging

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  6. Yes, that is another form of Sea .. tragic but real!!

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    1. Hi Scorpio! :)
      Happy you loved it! My pleasure...
      I read about you..You are just 10! And you writes Awesome!
      Wish you the best of Blogging! God Bless you.

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  8. Beautiful concept expressed nicely. Just loved it. And thanks for finally visiting my blog.

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    1. Welcome to My Friendship, TF :)

      Happy you liked the concept.Thanks
      Yep! Finally..LOL
      Will be your frequent reader. Let me finish my exams :)

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  9. It reminds me how life is a paradox!!!
    ATB for BAT

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    1. Thanks Karan. Nice to have you here :)

      Best wishes to you too...

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  10. //even if your waves touches my feet Million times //

    wow, love those lines!

    Do stop by my blog! Cheers - Kappu

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  11. very nice 55..liked it very much..all the best..

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    1. Hi Sayoni!
      After a long time! Happyyyyy me! :)

      You liked ..my pleasure! Thank you so much for the wishes.
      Happy Blogging!

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    2. That's so sweet of you Simran.. Ya.. after quite a long time.. was a bit busy to go through the blogs.. all the best wishes for you dear..

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    3. Enthusiastic Me! to read your reply! :)
      Thank you so much...really kind of you! Hope to have your precious words on each of my work .. :)

      Pleased me to have your wishes! Thanks dear

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  12. Thats why they say ..
    Jo dhun saaz se nikly woh sab ne suni
    Jo saaz pe guzri woh kissi ne nahin suni


    Bikram's

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  13. A beautiful concept , all the best for BAT .A Lovely Post , Belated Happy Friendship Day .~Desire v/s Destiny
    http://xs2rahulz.blogspot.in/

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    1. Happy Friendship Day to you too Rahul! :)
      Thank you so much!

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  14. you managed to leave such an impression in such few words! brilliant!

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    1. Welcome to My Friendship, justanotherwakeupcall

      Words are always powerful when used aptly! :) That's the art F'55 requires.
      Thank you so much dear! Happy to have you here!

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  15. A different take on the picture. ATB

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    1. Welcome to My Friendship, Srikant!

      Thank you so much! :)

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  16. this is a lovely expression dear!!! :D

    few words said a lot!
    absolutely lovely sweetheart ! :D
    and yes a very happy friendship day to you !!

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    1. Thank you so much aish! reading your words makes me happy!

      Same to you too buddy! :)

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  17. I liked the shadorma..All the best !

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    1. Happy you liked! thank you so much, Manasa! :)

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  18. Shadorma and 55-er, what a way to express the pain, "Wont' forgive you, even if your waves touches my feet Million times" - Only some writers have the ability to create meanings from what happens in general. You've written a masterpiece here.. Thanks! Keep writing..

    Someone is Special

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    1. Hi Special One!

      Shadorma and F'55 both are new to me and I am so happy that I justified with my very attempt.I wish I could make you say the same with the creation of my other write ups too :)
      Thank you so much! You made my day...

      Stay Smiling!

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    2. Do come and vote!

      Someone is Special

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    3. Little One, Do update the blogger name who introduced Blog-a-Ton. Do come and vote.. :D

      Someone is Special

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    4. Oops! I missed :P
      Thanks for reminding me :) :)

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    5. Little One,

      :) Congrats on the well deserved win.. Keep writing.. Keep winning..

      Someone is Special

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    6. Special One,

      Yeyyy! I am so excited! :)
      Want to covey you my heartiest Thanks! for being there everytime to encourage and support me :)

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    1. Welcome to My Friendship, muthu!

      Glad you felt the idea interesting! thanks!

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  20. Wow! I'd never pick a 55er to do well. However, this one's really really nice. The thing about touching the feet is so so wow. It's like why did it never occur to me :) Very good job.

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    1. Welcome to My Friendship , Kshitij

      Happy my words touched you...Hope you write one 55 soon :)
      Pleasure to have you here. Thank you so much.

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    1. Welcome to My Friendship, jaish_vats

      Thank you so much :)

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  22. Good one and nice Shadorma. Good luck for BAT.

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    1. Happy you liked the Shadorma. Thanks Neha! :)

      Best wishes to you too dear.

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  23. Good attempt Simran.. nicely expressed the feeling.. good luck

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  24. Great lines ! loved d line, '' Hey Sea, You swallowed him, I wont' forgive you even if your waves touches my feet Million times''
    Lovely :)

    Do stop-by to read the CHIAROSCURO OF LIFE - Clouds

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  25. you never fail to convey the most perfect emotions in your poetry, simran! <3 :-)

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    1. Glad to know that! thank you so much dear :)

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