Saturday, June 11, 2011

The Other Day




This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 21; the twenty-first edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following http://blogaton.in/">Blog-a-Ton.





I’m ready for tonight’s party, DJ and bright dancing lights,
I getup mildly like a princess,
Everyone’s eye was chasing my steps but I was waiting for one on whom my eyes get struck…
It was like God had listened to my heart.
My eyes were at rest;
When I saw a guy whose soothing appearance took me to the other world of my dreams and felt the peace within my soul,
My heart beats were so fast just like a drum when patted,
There were many but my eyes were struck at his blue shining eyes,
They were not ready to leave his appearance.
His eyes strike to mine;
He returned me a cute smile and I accepted him in reply by passing him a smile,
He walked to me; I was bit nervous and was bit excited…
He came to me holding my hand he kissed and softly he asked, ‘’Hey Beautiful Girl Can You Dance With me’’?
I little hesitated but my smile was saying of my heart...
Holding my hand he took me to the dancing floor,
We danced; we talked,
We said all within our heart…
But still I wanted to say something; I was worrying...
Should I tell him now?
And suddenly I said of my heart; I love you and want to marry you..!
He replied softly ‘’Love you too darling but I can’t marry you’’ …
I asked him the reason; He told me the bitter truth of his life,
I’m suffering from brain hemorrhage at last stage;
This night is my last night so, I came here just to enjoy the last night of my life and was came here to meet someone special like you ; who can make my last moment memorable…
You’re like an angel; Thanks for making my last night so beautiful,
I’ll never forget you, he was in tears …
Wait for… maybe one day you’ll get your soul mate your charming prince but promise me you’ll never forget me;
I told him, you’re the only my charming prince of my dreams …
I was waiting for someone like you; a tear trickle down from my eyes,
I’ll never forget you my prince; no one can take your place …
I’ll be in the wait to meet you the other day... Come soon!
And with a smile and tears in eyes, he said,’’the other day’’.





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46 comments:

  1. very sad but very tender nicely done!!!

    http://jpweddingphotograpy.blogspot.com/2011/06/something-completely-different-today.html

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  2. Oh little one...you always manage to amaze me with your creativity and imagination...Your well of inspiration is always running and I really commend you for that.

    This brought a tear to my eye... so close to my heart ;)...

    Keep on enhancing your writing skills... loved it :*

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  3. hmm very nicely written :) the other will come some day :P

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  4. Wow, it was like a tumultuous tumbling of love, almost there, given and then, denied. Though, he did not have to die. :-|

    Nice story nevertheless.


    Cheers,
    Blasphemous Aesthete

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  5. wow awesome ya.u write superb but it was so sad. really loved this one

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  6. Really touching, justifying the title too........i guess it's a contest, wish you luck then...

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  7. Very tender love story and nice narrative... Though "Some other day" would have been a nicer way to end it!

    ATB for BAT

    Read mine at The Other Day

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  8. A well written story. Poetic and perhaps you have written it like a song. Sad ending though. Good job!

    Sureindran - The Other Day

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  9. I was expecting a happy ending....
    never-the-less it is beautiful.

    All the best !

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  10. I have a special love for poems and this is one of the best poems I have read so far..

    "I was waiting for someone like you; a tear trickle down from my eyes" and the pic took my breathe away..

    Sadness. Sadness.. Sadness..

    "and with a smile and tears in eyes, he said, "the other day"

    I am wordless here.. This poem is gonna to be one of the fav's this time in BAT..

    and PS: the graphics you have added at the background and the wibiya tool bar make the blog load slow.. so please take care of it..

    Wanna know what happened the other day?

    Someone is Special

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  11. very sad and nicely written story....i love it and picture of Princess Diana(dancing one) is awesome...

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  12. soul mates don't throw lovely words but are there for you when you need them.

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  13. very sad and nicely written story... very aptly narrated...

    ATB for BAT!

    Read mine at The other day

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  14. Such a sad and sweet tale of love...my heart skipped a beat at the end..lovely

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  15. touchin write....it was like a rose grew bloomed n then as predestined reduced to nothinness yet left its fragrnc lingrin everywhr...:)...pleasure readin it...:)

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  16. Offo you write stories too!
    Enjoyed reading this....though climax was sad :)

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  17. Very well done. Sometimes life gives us sad endings and there's nothing to be done. You've written this so well - superb imagery through your words. If this is for a contest I hope you win!

    http://www.mariscamera.blogspot.com/

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  18. You touched me really deep with this one,I think this is the best u have written so far..beautiful,Simaran.

    We all want to fall in love. Why? Because that experience makes us feel completely alive. Where every sense is heightened, every emotion is magnified, our everyday reality is shattered and we are flying into the heavens. It may only last a moment, an hour, an afternoon. But that doesn't diminish its value. Because we are left with memories that we treasure for the rest of our lives.

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  19. Very touching and heart warming... very beautiful Simran... you are really magical with your words, Keep it up :)

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  20. @Irfan
    Even I don't know...why so :(

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  21. @Dear one:
    I'm so happy that you liked it and again my thoughts amazed you ;)
    I'm working on my writing skills..
    Thank you so much, Dear one... :)

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  22. @Geets
    But I want the same ,Geets :p

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  23. @Anshul:
    Glad that you liked it!Thank you so much :)

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  24. @Some unspoken words
    Thank you so much dear :)

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  25. @Mohini
    That I was waiting to listen for..
    Thank you :D

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  26. @Ashish
    Welcome to my blog
    Thank you :)

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  27. @Sureindran:
    Hmm..so you loved it!
    Thank you :)

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  28. @Shobha:
    Hmm..next time there will be happy ending :)..
    Thank you so much :)

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  29. @SIS:
    Thank you sooo much for such a beautiful comment :)..Hoping to win..and even your post is awesome! enjoyed it..Ya I'll take care of these dancing applications :P
    Take care!

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  30. @Nava.K
    That's true!
    Thank you

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  31. @Sulekkha
    That was only my intention..lol..
    Thank you :)

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  32. @Vaisakhi
    Beautifully said, Thanks :)

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  33. @Valli
    Hmm..just tried to write :P
    Thanks

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  34. @Mari
    Need your wishes :)
    Thank you so much ..

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  35. @Alpana:
    Thank you so much for such Beautiful words:)...Once in a life loves grasps us so tight and hardly it leaves us!

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  36. @Arti:
    I'm so happy that you likes my word selection..it's an honor and a great compliment!Thank you so much,Arti :)

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  37. count my vote meanwhile i drench in this post .... i mean it.

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  38. @Srikanth
    Welcome to my blog..
    Thanks for stopping by..Hope to see you again..:)

    @Mahesh:
    Welcome to my blog ..
    Thank you so much :D
    hope to see you again..:)

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~Simran