Tuesday, March 22, 2011

Pain Within


I am in pain,
Have nothing to gain,
I am crying rolling down tears,
I am alone ; no one is here,
I want to make our relationship deeper,
But you are not ready to maintain it's demeanour,
I always tried to decipher your heart,
But you always deplored my emotions,
Eyes are staring at you with fear, 
I want my grief to be shared,
But there is no one not even you to care,
There is no one to hear,
But I want to make all things clear,
There is nothing more in my life to cheer..
Because I am far away from my dear,
And that's the voice of my pain within that no one can hear.

42 comments:

  1. How you write so well yaar..so mature..at this age u are writing about inner pain...with so much intensity....u always amaze me...

    I m still questioning how come u hv experienced such different situations of life at this early stage of life...???how and what??

    at your age life is so lively and joyful...somehow I think you are a poetess by heart...by born....

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  2. Aww..simo baby..that was a heartbreak poem.
    Very nicely done sweet<3 :)

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  3. sad one but if this is NOT fiction then time to move on :) find someone who cares and loves one ..

    Bikram's

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  4. :( y r u so sad ..keep smiling dear

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  5. nicely penned....words woven beautifully...but y so sad...as far as i know u u r not the sad typo writr....neways...it was a good read...:)

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  6. a very nice written poem tells ur sad mood.hmm so why are you so sad dear.
    we are hear when u are sad,
    just tell us what do u need,
    we shall try to cheer you up,
    as well as will try to make u smile,
    so do smile and cheer up for ur frnds haa... keep smiling.. there are so many who cares about you and who loves you.. :)

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  7. but then, why hold on to something that does not exist?

    Nicely written.

    Cheers,
    Blasphemous Aesthete

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  8. Really touching! I am speechless.

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  9. truly a painful thought..one of my friend is going through this phase.. so I felt ur words as my ambience.. do visit my blog too.. c ya.. :)

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  10. well written piece! It is very passionate and full of emotion. I felt every word!

    Keep writing, dear friend. It is very good for you and more so when you share!

    thank you!

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  11. Very emotional. Loved the rhythm! :)

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  12. @Hema di
    Whatever comes into my mind and whatever I feel,I write ..
    Well,I would like to go with your last line :)

    Thanks a ton :)
    Keep Visiting

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  13. @Snehu
    Thank You so much sweety :)

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  14. @Bikramjit
    That's the way of living life :)
    Thanks :)

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  15. @Geeta
    I don't want smile alone..You too smile :)

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  16. @Some unspoken words
    How sweet you are :)
    Thank You so much for such beautiful lines and making me realize that I am not alone..

    Thank You so much dear :)

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  17. @Anshul
    It's affection not ready to leave..
    Thanks dear :)

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  18. @Monu Awalla
    Oh..It's a worse pain..
    Thanks :)

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  19. @Hope
    Happy that you felt it's deepness..
    It is good for me ..
    Thank You :)

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  20. @PsycheBubbles
    Glad that you liked it :)

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  21. Wonderfully written Simran...
    The lines "But there is no one not even you to care" were just amazing:)

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  22. Sad and touching poem but so wisely done!

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  23. Very good ... your language is very good ... presentation is excellent as the blog theme is very beautiful ...

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  24. @Short poems
    Welcome To my Blog:)
    Thank You :D
    Do visit again ..

    @Indranil Bhattacharjee ........."सैल" Welcome :)
    Glad that you liked it :)
    Do visit again..

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  25. Amazing poem... BTw u knw wat.. as soon as that music at the backGround started i was like ! DANG ~~ Thats what i call a true poetry blog.. :)


    AMAZING >> :)
    REGARDS
    ARJUN SINGH

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  26. @Arjun Singh
    Welcome to my blog :)
    Thanks :)
    Do vist again

    @Amrendra ''amar''
    Thanks :)
    Do visit again

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  27. Very touching poem. sorry can't comment on latest post as I dont read Hindi :)

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  28. @Talha
    Thanks Dear..
    It's ok :)

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  29. @Asma
    Thank You so much dear :D

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  30. Simran, you have conveyed so much in these lines.. beautiful pain, I have to say... and to lose something is the worst pain in this world, hope he comes back soon..

    if this is just a thought then I am glad that you have a great talent..

    I would have been much more happier if you had shared this with BlogJunta 'to have loved and lost' contest and I am damn sure this would have won of the awards there..

    SmileS..

    Someone is Special

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  31. @Someone is Special
    Thanks for such a lovely compliment dear :)
    Yeah , will surely post on blog junta :D

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  32. Very nice. I can really feel the helplessness.

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  33. @FLIM FLAM SAM
    Welcome to my blog :)
    Glad that you felt it!
    Thank You so much for following ..
    Keep Visiting..

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  34. Ohw dear...Even I felt those feelings..:(
    Everything will be alri8 soon :]
    heartfelt poem with full of emotions...
    keep writing Simran

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  35. @Valli
    Glad that you felt my words so deep..
    Thanks for your wishes :)
    Keep Visiting dear :)

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  36. Simran, you are sooooooooo talented. HOw deep you think. Well done

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  37. Always Happy
    Hey,Thanks dear! :)
    Glad that you liked it..
    Take care! :)

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~Simran